Wednesday, December 17, 2008

Sentences should mean something

From a New York Times article about Evander Holyfield:

"Nor is it about pride or re-establishing his name, no small feat for someone so far removed from fame, other than for his “Dancing With the Stars” gig, that Google Earth would be hard-pressed to find him."

What does "So far removed from fame that Google Earth would be hard-pressed to find him." Mean. Is Google Earth good at finding famous people? No, of course not. So maybe it's a metaphor. Is Google Earth good at finding famous sites, like landmark buildings or natural wonders? Well yes. Is it bad at finding non-famous things, like your house or your hometown or some random barn in Arkansas? No. It's good at those things too, which is a good deal of its charm. So what, exactly, is the reference to Google Earth intended to do? Why is it there? I literally do not know. This is bad writing at its most blatant and it's in the New York Times and I know its a sports story but an editor should have caught this because it's a meaningless sentence. How would I fix it? Well, I would, perhaps, not accuse someone of being removed from fame when I was writing a BOXING article about him for the NEW YORK TIMES. Non-famous boxers do not get into the New York Times unless they have just beaten a famous boxer and thus become famous themselves. There are over 170 articles about Holyfield's upcoming fight in Google's news aggregator. Holyfield is less famous now than when he got his ear bitten off by Mike Tyson, but he's well remembered by boxing fans and the populace at large. I'd wager more people remember the ear biting than the Dancing appearance.

This sentence is the kind of lazy writing that a decent high school or college is supposed to beat out of you. It doesn't belong in professional writing and it certainly doesn't belong in the New York Times. It's not just that standards have slipped, it's like they barely exist anymore. You want to make a specious claim combined with an incomprehensible reference in the paper of record? Go ahead.

Shameful.

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